Descent Into Eternity

Did you love the Twilight Saga? How about the Harry Potter Books? Does the thought of mythical beings and places excite your imagination? Do magic powers and vampires interest you? If so, you should read Descent Into Eternity. It’s about all of those things; and love; and despair; and life on the edge of reality. That’s where I like to be when I read a story. I never wanted Twilight to end. Thank you Stephanie Meyer, for the best Vampire love story ever written! I had the idea for my main character while reading Eclipse, and started writing. I guess, what I need is input. I don’t want to be the Twilight knock off, but I think my story is good and worthy of telling. I need to know if it is interesting thus far, and if, after reading what I have here, you want to read more. I have it all played out in my head, ‘til the end; and it's been very hard. I've never done this before, so please: critique this- good, bad, I just want to know what you think.
Thank You!
Lauretta (author of Descent Into Eternity)